All Wrong by ClawofCat

09/02/2007 06:08 am
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beautiful read, thanl you
Thanks for commenting, vladt!

08/31/2007 03:37 am
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beautiful chapter. More soon, please.
Thanks, and I'm working on it as we speak.

08/31/2007 01:34 am
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This was a lovely chapter. I particularly loved the paragraph where Spike watches Buffy lay herself open for him. It was very powerful. These are great characterizations - very true to both characters. And I like (okay, I don't like, like, cause I'm not as big a fan of darkness as I am of believable fluff, but you know what I mean. :)the way Dawn is letting her possible dissolution into the Key cause her to sink into a darkness even when she's still Dawn. Very nicely done, sweetie.
Thanks for the thorough review, Patti. And the paragraph you mention is my fave, too. Some nice crafting of imagery there. It was fun trying to consider how Buffy would be viewed through Spike's eyes. This is a bit fluffier than my usual, so it was important for me to try and make clear what each of them were feeling, what their motivations were, in order to sell the scenario. And agreed on poor Dawn. She's really scared, and we'll see later what sorts of things she gets up to that were skimmed over in Ch. 1. As you may have guessed, Ch. 1 is essentially the story, and everything I write now is how they got there, what has caused all this, and how they deal with it.

Syndyloo
08/30/2007 08:47 pm
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Love this story, your writing is amazing.
Thanks so much! I think my styles changed a bit from Ch. 1 to Ch. 2, but since I'll be updating this regularly, I'll try and keep it more consistant.

08/30/2007 02:48 pm
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This was just beautiful. Thank you.
Thanks for saying so. I tried to really tap into Spike's motivations here. He was a former poet, so I think the pretty description of his observations seems fitting. Thanks for reading!

huckleberry
08/30/2007 01:28 pm
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Oh my, you write beautifully. This story has been lovely to read, so looking forward to more
Thanks so much for your kind words. Toiling on Ch. 3 as we speak!

06/30/2007 09:14 am
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Very interesting start.
Thanks! And I hope to keep it just as interesting in the next chapter. More soonish.

06/30/2007 01:56 am
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"the PTB's idea of a reward." some reward. dawn and spike are in bad shape, and buffy, probably, is not much better. very good read, thank you.
Yeah, Spike and the girls aren't having an easy time of it post-NFA. Poor dears. More on Buffy and Spike next chapter. Thanks for reading!

cooncat1122
06/29/2007 12:51 am
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What an unusual story beginnings. Really intrigued and hooked in on this one. Update VERY soon. Just WOW!
Thanks, cooncat! I'm glad you're into this verse. Hang in there for an update. I'm working on it.

Syndyloo
06/28/2007 03:52 pm
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Wow..don't really know what to say. What an intriguing start to what I'm sure is going to be a fantastic story. The darkness and angst were spot on, I loved it.
I'm glad you enjoyed this. I feel like each successive story I write seems to get more angsty and dark. But I love it too. Thanks for reading!

06/28/2007 07:36 am
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Wow! This is really excellent. What a very interesting idea. Their parallel instabilities draw them together, while they try to figure out how to minimally survive. Great characterizations. I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this.
Thank you for the kind words, Pin! I'm glad you're feeling this 'verse and buying into the way I've written the characters here. It is intriguing watching them fight inner battles in contrast to all the outer ones, isn't it? More soon.

Tamara
06/28/2007 07:14 am
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Very intense .
And it will only be more so next chapter. Get ready for how all this has been effecting Buffy and Spike. You know it ain't gonna be pretty...

06/28/2007 07:11 am
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Aha - something different. Your version of the Shanshu is certainly interesting... and poor Dawn! Seems like hard times ahead. And coupled with a baby?

You can find me here, sitting in the corner, avidly waiting for the next chapter.
*Hands you a blanket and Doritos* If you're going to the corner, you might as well be comfortable!

Very cool that I was able to offer up something different and that you found it intriguing. Things will never be easy for our little family in this 'verse. Whereas before the Scoobies were always battling external obstacles, a lot of it has turned inward. And throwing a baby into this dysfunctional mix might not have been Buffy and Spike's wisest decision, but in a world full of uncertainty, sometimes you have to make hard choices. Thanks for reading and commenting. More soonish.

06/28/2007 07:00 am
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Wow, that was very intense... And an evil cliffhanger too :P
Yeah, definately intense. It's a hard future I've painted for them where survival takes on a whole new meaning. Hee, glad the end left you with questions. More shall be revealed next chapter. Thanks for reading!