relurker
10/22/2011 11:24 am
Beautiful! It kept me holding my breath, such a tangible anguish.
I think that the suspended ending is perfect in this, but it was also a big let-down: what? I wanna know how it goes next!
scarlett2u
08/31/2010 01:53 pm
This is incredibly beautiful and well done. Very haunting and poetic. Thanks for writing and sharing it.
Ikepear
10/15/2008 11:21 pm
4 stars. Bittersweet, powerful & well-written. No wasted words, no meanness, just strong feeling clearly portrayed.
Bravo indeed.
Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and I really appreciate the feedback - it's nice and specific.
All4Spike
10/15/2008 02:12 am
Heartbreakingly beautiful.
Glad you liked it!
10/15/2008 01:08 am
Lovely piece. I especially like the open end that allows the reader to take this anywhere they wish.
Kathleen
Kathleen
Thanks for commenting! Glad you liked the ending, I know open endings can be very vexing for some readers ;)
10/14/2008 11:14 pm
Ah, I read this somewhere else. I'm so glad you've posted it here for our readers to enjoy. :)
Ha, thank you for reading twice! :D