Very Good!!!     I do hope you will be able to finish or at least add to this story.    WELL DONE!

Thank you for sharing your talent with the rest of us.

I'm loving this story and can't wait for more. You need a beta though. If you post more please email me at lonewolfjags@gmail.com

Just finished what you've written till now in one  go. Really perfect procrastination from cleaning the house. Everyone was very much in character to the point I could hear the proper voices in my head saying the lines. 

That was a cute bit of sisterly interaction, nicely done.