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Decoy by Isabel
Chapter: City of lights, city of sins
Brunettepet
06/13/2008 09:18 pm
This was a vivid, entertaining chapter. Your intriguing set up and excellent character voices have already pulled me in. I'm enjoying this introspective Spike, still aching from Buffy's seeming rejection. Lazarus is an entertaining character, and I'm looking forward to his back story.
Sunnydale sounds like a beehive of military activity. That can't be good. Off to chapter two.
Sunnydale sounds like a beehive of military activity. That can't be good. Off to chapter two.
I hope you'll enjoy the rest of the story just as much as you enjoyed the first chapter ;) Thank you so much for your great review. Keep sending your comments, hearing stuff like this motivates me to keep writing!
04/05/2007 08:01 am
excellent start, thank you. lazarus seems to be a moderating influence, not that spike can be influenced for long. read the reviews for the chapter. can anyone explain to me what the hell angie is ranting about in the chapter i just read and reviewed? write your story, luv.
Thank you. So happy that you like it. And don't worry, I only let good reviews influence my writing. You're right, it's my story to write. And I'm so glad so many people came to my defence lol. Good to know I am loved ;)
infinitecrisis
04/04/2007 10:57 pm
Nice beginning. Please keep the update sooner than later! Yes both characters have a lot of issues to resolved but hopefully the your story wouldn't turn into heavy heavy angst.
For Angie:
1. Xander pretended that his attempted rape on Buffy during hyena's possession never happened
a. He kept bashing Angel for turning into Angelus without his soul.
b. He kept blaming Spike souless/souled for just about everything including the rape scene.
However he wouldn't blame himself. The problem is Buffy, until now still wouldn't tell her friends. In "Conversation with the Dead People" she admitted her faults to a vamp but afraid to tell her sister and friends or even Spike. Just a minute or few after Spike rushed off with guilt, Xander found out what happened.. Buffy tried to explain to Xander but in a poor way. She took Dawn to Spike for protection. If she does believe in Spike in the end even when everything happened between Buffy/Spike who are you to JUDGE Angie?
2. Willow attempted to destroy the world.
3. Angelus attempted to destroy the world.
4. Ressurection spell by Willow assisted by Xander, Tara and Anya was the catalyst of events in season 7. It had led to many deaths.
5. How Angelus created Dru? Horrible.
6. Xander dancing spell had caused some deaths but he seem to shrug it off, yet again.
When I say destroying the world meaning potentially billions of death. Billions. Get it Angie? The review has to be in the context of this author's story. Sorry for the rant Isabel.
For Angie:
1. Xander pretended that his attempted rape on Buffy during hyena's possession never happened
a. He kept bashing Angel for turning into Angelus without his soul.
b. He kept blaming Spike souless/souled for just about everything including the rape scene.
However he wouldn't blame himself. The problem is Buffy, until now still wouldn't tell her friends. In "Conversation with the Dead People" she admitted her faults to a vamp but afraid to tell her sister and friends or even Spike. Just a minute or few after Spike rushed off with guilt, Xander found out what happened.. Buffy tried to explain to Xander but in a poor way. She took Dawn to Spike for protection. If she does believe in Spike in the end even when everything happened between Buffy/Spike who are you to JUDGE Angie?
2. Willow attempted to destroy the world.
3. Angelus attempted to destroy the world.
4. Ressurection spell by Willow assisted by Xander, Tara and Anya was the catalyst of events in season 7. It had led to many deaths.
5. How Angelus created Dru? Horrible.
6. Xander dancing spell had caused some deaths but he seem to shrug it off, yet again.
When I say destroying the world meaning potentially billions of death. Billions. Get it Angie? The review has to be in the context of this author's story. Sorry for the rant Isabel.
infinitecrisis
04/04/2007 06:33 pm
Nice beginning. Please keep the update sooner than later! Yes both characters have a lot of issues to resolved but hopefully the your story wouldn't turn into heavy heavy angst.
For Angie:
1. Xander pretended that his attempted rape on Buffy during hyena's possession never happened
a. He kept bashing Angel for turning into Angelus without his soul.
b. He kept blaming Spike souless/souled for just about everything including the rape scene.
However he wouldn't blame himself. The problem is Buffy, until now still wouldn't tell her friends. In "Conversation with the Dead People" she admitted her faults to a vamp but afraid to tell her sister and friends or even Spike. Just a minute or few after Spike rushed off with guilt, Xander found out what happened.. Buffy tried to explain to Xander but in a poor way. She took Dawn to Spike for protection. If she does believe in Spike in the end even when everything happened between Buffy/Spike who are you to JUDGE Angie?
2. Willow attempted to destroy the world.
3. Angelus attempted to destroy the world.
4. Ressurection spell by Willow assisted by Xander, Tara and Anya was the catalyst of events in season 7. It had led to many deaths.
5. How Angelus created Dru? Horrible.
6. Xander dancing spell had caused some deaths but he seem to shrug it off, yet again.
When I say destroying the world meaning potentially billions of death. Billions. Get it Angie? The review has to be in the context of this author's story. Sorry for the rant Isabel.
For Angie:
1. Xander pretended that his attempted rape on Buffy during hyena's possession never happened
a. He kept bashing Angel for turning into Angelus without his soul.
b. He kept blaming Spike souless/souled for just about everything including the rape scene.
However he wouldn't blame himself. The problem is Buffy, until now still wouldn't tell her friends. In "Conversation with the Dead People" she admitted her faults to a vamp but afraid to tell her sister and friends or even Spike. Just a minute or few after Spike rushed off with guilt, Xander found out what happened.. Buffy tried to explain to Xander but in a poor way. She took Dawn to Spike for protection. If she does believe in Spike in the end even when everything happened between Buffy/Spike who are you to JUDGE Angie?
2. Willow attempted to destroy the world.
3. Angelus attempted to destroy the world.
4. Ressurection spell by Willow assisted by Xander, Tara and Anya was the catalyst of events in season 7. It had led to many deaths.
5. How Angelus created Dru? Horrible.
6. Xander dancing spell had caused some deaths but he seem to shrug it off, yet again.
When I say destroying the world meaning potentially billions of death. Billions. Get it Angie? The review has to be in the context of this author's story. Sorry for the rant Isabel.
LOL Excellent points. I couldn't have said it better. And I'm not over the Once more with feeling fiasco. People died because of Xander and he never, not once, realized that. But oh yeah... He has a SOUL. So that' fine. Anya never showed an ounce of remorse for a thousand years of killing. But oh yeah... she has a SOUL now. So that's OK. As you can tell, I have issues with both the "soul" thing, and Xander lol. But enough about that. No I won't turn this into something heavy with angst. I don't do angst much. Some bickering, some arguing, some issues to resolve... but that's it. Thanks for the review. I enjoyed it.
dicecanntcry
03/26/2007 11:35 pm
Very interesting beginning! Hope to see more soon! ;)
Not real sure where all the 'rape' talk came from... *scratches head*
And as for what Angie supposedly wants to come out of this, I say 'Isabel, it's your story. Write it however the hell you want'. i personally like the 'lovey, dovey' crap, but i ain't the one writing the story...
Not real sure where all the 'rape' talk came from... *scratches head*
And as for what Angie supposedly wants to come out of this, I say 'Isabel, it's your story. Write it however the hell you want'. i personally like the 'lovey, dovey' crap, but i ain't the one writing the story...
Thank you for your support. I like the lovey dovey crap too lol It will take a little longer for this story to get to the romantic part, but it will happen. Because I said so. lol. I all try to make it happen in a realistic way though and yes, they have issues to work on. Thanks for your review.
03/26/2007 08:48 pm
Very intriguing beginning. I really hadn't planned on buying the comic. Comics aren't really my thing, so I appreciate the fact that you're sharing a little of the plot with us. I like your oc - Lazarus is intersting and humorous - nice foil for Spike. Hope you update soon. I really want to see more; can't wait to find out what's going on in Sunnyhell. :)
Thank you so much! I just finished ch. 2 and will send it to my beta today. I will probably update next monday.
03/26/2007 08:14 pm
Rushing over here to review it again. I love this first chapter and can’t wait for the next.
LOL thank you! You won't have to wait too long for the next chapter. I'm thinking it should be ready by Monday. I'm really into this story now so it makes it easier to write.
03/26/2007 02:30 pm
oh man...what an excellent start, i love your oc, and this sounds like a fun road trip...looking forward to seeing what happens next, love ;)
Thank you! I thought Spike needed friends lol.
03/26/2007 02:27 pm
Nice teaser chapter. Looking forward to more.
Soon, promise. Thanks for your review.
BT_
03/26/2007 07:19 am
hmm. Looking forward to seeing where this one goes.
asylum? hope we get some backstory, too!
asylum? hope we get some backstory, too!
Not sure I'll get into the asylum story because it's a Spike comic book that I haven't read myself. But if I read it, I might have him tell the story later on in the fic. Glad you like it so far.
Tamara
03/26/2007 06:32 am
Actually I think angie's review wasn't anti-Spike.It had more to do with Buffy's contradictory behavior .
Buffy acted as if she was the innocent victim that had done no wrong yet soon after the supposed attempted rape she took her sister to be protected by Spike and she left an insane Spike in a school full of children.
If she truly considered Spike to be a rapist then she wouldn't have done either of these things.
The closest Buffy came to admitting guilt for her actions in season 6 was when she admitted that she used Spike . However she did not say she was sorry for doing so.
It sounds like she hopes that Spike in this fic will not easily forgive Buffy even after he finds out it wasn't her with the Immortal.Which is completely understandable especially considering the Angel kissing right after he told her that the night they had together was the best night of his life.
Buffy acted as if she was the innocent victim that had done no wrong yet soon after the supposed attempted rape she took her sister to be protected by Spike and she left an insane Spike in a school full of children.
If she truly considered Spike to be a rapist then she wouldn't have done either of these things.
The closest Buffy came to admitting guilt for her actions in season 6 was when she admitted that she used Spike . However she did not say she was sorry for doing so.
It sounds like she hopes that Spike in this fic will not easily forgive Buffy even after he finds out it wasn't her with the Immortal.Which is completely understandable especially considering the Angel kissing right after he told her that the night they had together was the best night of his life.
Yeah, I get that, Tamara. I just didn't think it had anything to do with my story. Well, it does in the way that it points out that they have issues, but I already know that and I'm keeping that in mind while writing. But thanks.
fanxstitch
03/26/2007 05:04 am
definitely an interesting beginning and has my attention.
Thanks for your review. I'm glad you like it.
DeanSamWinchesterfan
03/26/2007 04:01 am
I'm not a comic book reader,but this is one comic book I want to get.I already know the general info.(The main villian,poor Dawnie,why Buffy's considered bad.)Update soon.I like this so far.
I'm not a comic book reader either. Even the guy who sold it to me could tell just by looking at me. Completely out of my element there lol. But it's the next best thing to watching a season 8, so I couldn't pass up the opportunity. I bought it after a friend assured me that the "girl in question" incident was explained. I wouldn't have if not. Glad you like the story. Thanks.
03/26/2007 03:59 am
Uh, angie, why the hell are you on a Spuffy site if you hate Spike so much? You can check through the forum and see just what we think about the supposed attempted rape!
Probably the same thing I think about it lol. I don't even understand where that came from. Did I write something in my story that has something to do with the "rape" without even realizing? Weirdness...
angie
03/26/2007 03:47 am
looks good so far, just please - no wimpy, mopy or puppy spike or making this one of those lovey dovey 'spike sees buffy again and everything's fine because he doesn't care about any of the crap she's pulled on him' type of post buffy fics that are totally unrealistic for any healthy relationship - those types of stories seem popular despite the fact that we all saw how badly that type of a thing turned out in s6 when everything bad thing that happened between them was ALL spike's fault and buffy was the totally innocent victim - yah spike attacked buffy and HIS own actions were his fault but one thing about it especially bugged me (and almost ruined spuffy for me) - i have a younger sister and ther is NO WAY IN HELL that i would leave EVER her alone with anyone if i even suspected that they did anything close to trying to rape anyone so why was buffy going to have spike babysit dawn alone in the middle of an empty graveyard less than twelve hours after he "tried to rape me" without even warning dawn befroehand?! that and leaving an insane spike who "tried to rape me" in a school full of children (who couldnt possibly defend themselves against him if he did assault them) before she even heard anything about his soul caused me to seriously question how buffy perceived spike's attack on her cause actions dont even come close to what they should have been against an "evil soulless thing" who tried to rape her
ps i'm a female and i teach martial arts classes i know dozens of ways to subdue people without hurting them and some are completely painless so that chip didnt mean crap in keeping the 'horrible monster rapist' from sexualy assaulting dawn or anyone else if that was what he really wanted to do.
ps i'm a female and i teach martial arts classes i know dozens of ways to subdue people without hurting them and some are completely painless so that chip didnt mean crap in keeping the 'horrible monster rapist' from sexualy assaulting dawn or anyone else if that was what he really wanted to do.
I used to think every review is a good review, but since this one has almost nothing to do with my story... I'm not so sure anymore. I went back to the main page to see what I put under "genre" and it does say angst and romance. And that's what the story is going to be: angst and romance. No, I never had any intention to turn this into a lovey dovey sappy romantic kind of story, but if I had, I would. They do have a lot of issues to resolve and they will. I don't quite understand where the rant about the "rape" came from. Did I say anything in the chapter that reminded you of it? I'm not even sure who you're bashing here, Spike or Buffy. But one thing is for sure, I love them both dearly and don't really like hearing such nasty things about either one of them. Thanks anyway for taking the time to review. I do appreciate it.
Pam S
03/26/2007 02:45 am
Buffy and Sunnydale.. usually not so good for our hero.
Interested.
Interested.
Sunnydale, Spike and the US military... now that's an even scarier mix lol. Glad you're interested and I hope the next chapter will keep your interest. Thanks for the review.
Tamara
03/26/2007 02:35 am
I definitely like it!
Thanks for giving my story a chance, Tamara. I was really excited about starting to post it. I hope I can keep you interested. Next chapter will be out soon.
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